Saturday, May 19, 2012

A HEART FOR ME!

                                 Pined in hysterics;

                      bursting rage, anger; dismay

                   longs for pious heart!




I never find voice to my emotions and hence often end up with great loss, resulting in devastated situations, paradoxical questions! "why didn't I speak up, when I was supposed to!?" that's what I am usually left with in the end, but still My skeptical mind never allowed me to blurt out.. arrogance and two faced people always upset me, this resulted in the origin of the haiku :)

 

The above haiku is written for the Haiku Heights. The prompt for this week is 'PINE'. 

 

Hope you all like it and have a good time! :)

29 comments:

  1. This happens alot to me too. Sometimes I say, it might have been for the good that I didn't speak my heart because you never know who you might injure with your words.

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  2. then jnana we both are sailing in the same boat :0

    but we can always pen our feelings :) right???

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  3. Nice twist in the last line ~ Wishing you a good weekend ~

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    1. Thanks grace :) i wish the same for u :)

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  4. Powerful haiku as well as photo ~ thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  5. Maharukh, you are not alone.. and it's perhaps the feeling that you will not be understood or worse you will be misunderstood that must be stopping you to speak...happens ..but then one must come out of this..and speak when it is essential...

    Your haiku says a lot and it is very well crafted.

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    1. Thank you sir! :)
      obliged to have you here :) indeed it is just a feeling and m growing to the better part :)

      Thanks again for the haiku
      have a nice day :)

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  6. Intense... but never feel alone... evryone goes thru this phase atleast once in a while.. it's only for u to learn n move on! Good luck... Cheers! :)

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    1. theres always one phase or other going on, we learn to deal with it :) either we accept or improve :) thanks pranita! :)

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  7. Feels as angry as it does sad....I always check my visceral reaction to everyone's haiku, and the one that trigger emotions immediately are my favorites...

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    1. thanks joanne :) there were a lil corrections hope u like it even after the corrections :)

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  8. I too long for a pious heart..:( harsh world this is, no?

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    1. I feel the world is a beautiful place just the people are a lil absurd :)

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  9. I think this is very true. There are lot of people who are wanting that escape, but not finding the right heart. Well written.

    I do urge you to look into the syllable count though; a haiku is 17 syllables or under, usually in 5-7-5 form... yours has taken on a 6-8-6 :)

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    1. pined-monosyllabic
      in-monosyllabic
      hysteria-polysyllabic!

      bursting-disyllabic
      rage-monosyllabic
      and-monosyllabic
      anger-disyllabic
      dismay-disyllabic

      longs-monosyllabic
      for-monosyllabic
      a-monosyllabic
      pious-Disyllabic
      heart-monosyllabic

      i made a few changes which don't change the meaning hopefully but correct the format :) thanks for pointing it out :) still learning :)

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  10. That is the affliction affecting people. Many may not realize how they hurt others. It's good for us to be aware though. Great thought, Maha!

    Hank

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    1. yes Hank, the world surely will e a better place if everyone realize a lil that how much a boneless muscle can hurt others! till then all we can do is stay cautious :)

      Thanks hank for liking it :)

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  11. Brilliant post with the desc that touch heart,.good poet you are :)

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    1. Thank you Jaideep... m still learning :)

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  12. Longs for pious heart..:(
    Beautiful line...and very touching haiku :)

    Heart turned stone

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  14. Your words describe how I sometimes feel. I'm not the bursting type though - physically at least. Well done, Maharukh

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  15. no one physically bursts up, as far as i know but the bottled emotions really cause a mess...
    thanks hazel.. :)

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    1. oh.. thanks :) u understood it :P :)

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  17. I think many can relate to your words - at one time or another in their lives ... however, it is important to try to speak one's truth whenever possible ... A little easier as one gets older -- wishing we had done so when we were younger ...
    Forest Cathedral

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    1. With age come wisdom :)
      Thanks for sharing grace :)

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